A disclaimer: the essay has nothing to do with me in real life. I've just made it all up.
Hope you will understand my choice to arrange things this way.
Nowadays there are lots of huge and successful
companies and corporations which a great number of young people strive to work
for. While some people truly love medicine, history or sport, others find it
fascinating to work in IT. However, all the spheres mentioned above have
nothing to do with my preferences and dreams.
To begin
with, I've always been interested in space. Not only did I watch lots of
scientific films and series related to it when I was a child, but also I had
plenty of magazines on this topic. Stars, galaxies and even aliens have always
aroused my interest. That is why I decided to be an astronaut a long time ago. Now that I've
grown up, I can see that this occupation has many advantages which I am
satisfied with a lot.
Firstly,
generally, this job is very important in terms of exploration and research:
the more people become astronauts the better, faster and more thoroughly we can explore space. If a
bigger number of people took part in this mission (compared to that we have
today), it would allow the humanity to seek for other forms of life except that of
Earth. So, what I mean is, the general purpose of this occupation is humane. Plus, it’s
a great chance to meet lots of other people who share your interests and
desires and who want to improve this world just as I do.
Secondly, I'm
a perfect example of such type of person that fits a pattern of a true astronaut. I have never been afraid of
challenging myself, of tackling problems, facing my fears. In addition, my
health conditions also allow me to apply for this job. An astronaut must be a cold-headed, brave, intelligent
person with great physical abilities like endurance and stamina. Unfortunately,
people with bad health are not allowed to work there; much less can the
disabled people work there, however, it isn’t always like that. What is more, even
if a person's body is prepared to be in space conditions, it's not enough: astronauts have lots of physical exercises
as well as tasks aimed to practice their mind, to mentally prepare a human to
face extraterrestrial conditions. [Here is a link]
Thirdly, I
have enough knowledge in the English language which, I assume, would allow me
to work not only for Russian companies, but also for such corporations as NASA.
A specialist with good knowledge of any language, especially English, has
always been more employable than that of just specialists.
Fourthly, in
the Russian company Roscosmos which I want to work for, salaries for astronauts
are incredibly high. Moreover, such people always have a stable income, long holidays
and lots of other benefits, including early retiring with high pension. For
now, I need to graduate from this uni so that I can enroll at the Moscow's one
where I can study to be an astronaut.
All things
considered, being an astronaut is a very prestigious and responsible job. Not
only does it show your knowledge in everything: engineering, language, mathematics,
etc., but also it shows how well you can get on with people as living on a
spacecraft in small rooms requires that you must communicate with others all
the time. I've been dreaming about this occupation since I was seven, and I
will definitely aspire to it in the nearest future.
Reference page: (2017, July 7). What It's Like to Become a NASA Astronaut: 10 Surprising Facts. Retrieved from: www.space.com
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Hello Nikita,
ОтветитьУдалитьI'm curious what prompted you to write this work. Can you share with me/us how you came up with this idea?
I can say that it was interesting for me to read it, and I enjoyed it very much. Itdemonstrates your imaginattion and sense of style. Great!
However, there are quite a few things to consider: they are mosrly to do with the Mechanics of writing
Удалитьsuch people always have ART stable income
job is very important in terms of **explorations and researches: WNum > here both words should be in singular; "exploration" can be used in plural in e.g. in reference to various types of explorations or a collection of explorations; "research" on the other hand is ALWAYS used in singular and is an uncounrable noun; however, if it is combined with the word "study", it can be used in both sg and pl., so it's correct to say "a research study" in sg. and "research studies" in pl
it would allow THE humanity: the definite article is necessary
I'm a perfect example of **that type of person > such a type of person
enough knowledge **in (PREP) the English language
such people always have ART stable income
to enroll **at (PREP) the university
being an astronaut is ART very prestigious and responsible job
Gr: requires that you must communicate: check how to say it correctly
In spite of it, I'd like to repeat that your work is enjoyable to read. I think it's wonderful
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