The Financier I chose to read a novel 'The Financier' written by Theodore Dreiser. Honestly, I had a choice to make: to read Martin Eden (the book which I had already read in Russian) or to read the Financier which was completely new book to me. I decided to give it a go and start reading the Financier. It's important to mention that I enjoy reading such books as they encourage their readers to act like the main characters, to achieve their own success through constant struggles and adversities. The book cover doesn't contain a lot of info about the plot. It only briefly tells a reader about the author(1). 'The Financier' is based on real-life of streetcar tycoon whose real name was Charles Yerkes. I reckon the main theme of the book is competition or, to put it in another way, a financial war. It symbolizes Frank's determination in gaining his goals and his desire to have an upper hand over everyone competing with him. He wants total domination
Nikita,
ОтветитьУдалитьyou have schosen to dicusss a very sensitive political issue and considered it from several perspectives, though because of the length of your work you couldn't go deeper into the discussion of the question.
One aspect of your work in need of revision is reference formatting. Here is an example of a correct reference:
Roth, A. “Russia-Ukraine: Tentative Progress at First Talks for Three Years.” 10 Dec. 2019, https://www.theguardian.com/world/2019/dec/10/russia-ukraine-tentative-progress-at-first-talks-for-three-years.
Remamber to use the CitationMachine (http://www.citationmachine.net) if you are not sure about formatting details
Nikita,
ОтветитьУдалитьyou have done a lot of work writing this essay. Can you explain what its purpose is? What did you want to achieve by writing it? It will help me to comment on it
Things to consider:
I'd like to consider it **from two periods > to consider 2 periods in its development
it’s been a subtle but vital progress > there has been
This is a fragment: In particular, the Ukrainian border which is now being held by Russian soldiers who allow people to move from Ukraine to Russia > add the predicate
Articles:
consider Russian annexation
about a certain period importance of this event: not sure what you mean
launched from the part of ART territory
an agreement on prisoner **changes (WW)
1. prisoner EXchanges. Corrected that one.
Удалить2. The purpose of this essay is to demonstrate to people that there is a hope that relations between Russia and Ukraine might be somehow improved and some mutually beneficial agreements can be made. Consequently, the meeting was the very first step to at least find this equilibrium so that relationships can be developed in the nearest future.
3. About the fragment: I've decided to reconstruct the first part of the sentence. Could you check the sentence now, please?
4. Not sure what you meant by annexation. I assume I should add 'Russian'.
5. A certain period: I wrote ' a missile was launched from the part of Ukranian territory controlled by pro-Russian separatists.' I didn't write the word 'art'.
**from two periods > to consider 2 periods in its development- Corrected.
Удалитьit’s been a subtle but vital progress > there has been - Corrected.
I see, thanks. It's become clearer with your explanation.
ОтветитьУдалить5. It's my comment:it refers to article use
Nikita,
ОтветитьУдалитьas I have mentioned before, you have chosen a very difficult topic to consider and put a lot of effort into making it persuasive. The conclusion can be improved, though. Let me remind you that there are special techniques to start and finish your piece of writing in a way that will appeal to the readers. Here is a link to the list: http://writing2.richmond.edu/writing/wweb/conclude.html
Content: 5
Organisation: 5
Mechanics: 5
Language: 5
Referencing: 5