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1. In the era of electronics, computers are likely to be found in most of educational institutions or companies so that people can have more opportunities to learn or work with the help of technology.
2. Although the judge has not been yet provided with strong evidence against Scott Peretson, implication in a crime of the latter is still a disputable question.
3. The results of the recent survey detected that hamsters are considered to be by far the cutest rodents because of their fur.
4. Lots of middle-class people in America claim that colleges charge high tuition, however, not only do they provide students with specific knowledge that is necessary for their future work, but also they teach students how to think out of the box.
6.Although traditionally people make New Year’s resolutions about cutting weight, the recent research showed that only 30% of such people have enough discipline and persistence to make their wishes come true.
7.Prejudiced attitude towards new hip-hop artists results in their low ratings at the beginning of their carrier and causes them to tackle myriads of financial problems which results in their inability to organase tours and pay beat-makers so that they can create a hooky beat.
9. Due to the recent cases of fraud at insurance companies in Mexico, people are now sceptical about relying on their support. 
10. TV series Smallville received positive feedback from critics and televiewers for having not only a beautiful cast but also lots of plot twists. 

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  1. Thesis statements:
    N3: too narrow
    N7: too long
    **evidences: it is an uncountable word in English, so does not have a plural form
    fraud not froud
    10. positive feedbacks: check whether it can be used in plural
    **
    implication in **a (ART) crime of the latter is still a disputable question.

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